tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7866376891931829231.post7720566759347203836..comments2023-05-30T12:27:30.038+01:00Comments on izzy viney AS media: How does Calvin Klein represent females in this advert?Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7866376891931829231.post-91357991716360144872010-11-01T20:49:32.831+00:002010-11-01T20:49:32.831+00:00That level of formality in your opening 3 sentence...That level of formality in your opening 3 sentences is the style you'll need. <br /><br />There is still the occasional lapse with phrases like 'obviously I am going on stereotypes with this point as I am not a man'. If you want to express the difficulty of evaluating a text from a male ideology then this is how I'd phrase it<br /><br />'To equate beauty with male desires negates a female ability to control the 'gaze' of others. The male gaze makes the assumption that all males are heterosexual (and by extension all females are too) and can be seen to reinforce the ideology that women are somehow inferior to me. Not only is this view, in my opinion, disrespectful to women it also reduces males to a very narrow stereotypical representation, that of the lecherous and threatening predator. Undoubtably this image is constructed to focus specifically on Eva Medes figure, what cannot be made clear is who is being invited to gaze and where the power lies in the relationship between image and audience' <br /><br />Now that's a really dull sentence and takes ages to say what you wrote in a few lines. You need to find the happy medium.Mr Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12759789197085658607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7866376891931829231.post-54534510844148466952010-11-01T14:32:24.256+00:002010-11-01T14:32:24.256+00:00I've added a few lines to the opening, is ther...I've added a few lines to the opening, is there anywhere else that needs improving?Izzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04817480377654367517noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7866376891931829231.post-33104597518022319412010-10-31T20:48:55.101+00:002010-10-31T20:48:55.101+00:00Despite being an English teacher I'm running o...Despite being an English teacher I'm running out of adjectives. One taget I can set you is to work on the level of formality in your writing, this blog entry begins a bit too informally.<br /><br />That style is perfect for writing up lessons etc but in terms of formal essays and specifically exam prep you'll need to demonstrate a greater control of your lexis.<br /><br />I am nit picking at the minute though to be honest.Mr Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12759789197085658607noreply@blogger.com